Wow! What a thoughtful and detailed comment, Steve. Thanks so much for taking the time to read, share, and leave such wonderful feedback. It’s very much appreciated.🌹
Good stuff, all the contradictions: a thirst trap set "dripping with honesty"' ; "moved to make a move"; wanting space but "moved closer" and the rest. You could also pair this with Hendrix's "Love or Confusion"...
Tantalizing back & forth, great use of words — awesome sauce here!
Thank you! I’m delighted to hear that. “Awesome sauce” may be my favorite review so far. 😄💙
This really caught me up in the moment. So sensual, whilst almost never saying that. It was so real.
Thank you.🌹I’ve always thought suggestion is much more interesting than description. I’m glad it pulled you into the moment.🧡
Very good! Great soundtrack, too!
Thank you! Thanks for reading and sharing! 🌹🧡
Not fluent in affection!!! So good, Eve!
Thank you, Nora! Thanks for reading and sharing!🌹
Dear Ms. Zennarrow,
You write like someone who knows the exact temperature of a moment ...
the way a room shifts when someone touches your wrist,
the way desire can feel like a medical event.
You’re so good at that almost moment,
the one that could tip into tenderness or disaster.
This one hit me with that sideways‑Gulf‑Coast‑at‑dusk voltage I love ...
the kind of poem where desire keeps tripping over its own shoelaces
and pretending it meant to.
A choreography of closeness and retreat,
two people wanting to be brave
but not quite there yet.
It’s the oldest story in the book,
but you tell it with fresh blood.
May the night hush around you and the one who startles your pulse learn to meet you halfway.
Steve
Wow! What a thoughtful and detailed comment, Steve. Thanks so much for taking the time to read, share, and leave such wonderful feedback. It’s very much appreciated.🌹
I have noticed you are collecting all the cardia
Only asystole is left. Gulp
I know. You can almost tell my internship at the hospital has started.😅
Good stuff, all the contradictions: a thirst trap set "dripping with honesty"' ; "moved to make a move"; wanting space but "moved closer" and the rest. You could also pair this with Hendrix's "Love or Confusion"...
Thank you. 🌹 Oh yes, that’s a great choice. I might use it in another poem. I don’t think I’ve had a Hendrix soundtrack so far.
love this
Thank you so much. Thanks for reading!🌹
not fluent in affection. letting go is so hard. trusting. good one, Eve
Life’s confusing. Thanks, Linda.🌹